Wording suggestions for circular templates (in jinja2 scripts)
In the early-warning section of initial_body.jinja2:
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Streamline the text by changing with {% if early_warning_pipelines|length > 1 %}detections{% else %} a detection{% endif %} from the
to simply:detected by the
In em_bright.jinja2:
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Change The probability that any one of the binary components lie between
toThe probability that either of the binary components lies between
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Change between 3 to 5 solar mass
-->between 3 and 5 solar masses
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A space should be inserted after is astrophysical in origin,
before the{% else %}
In retraction.jinja2:
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I suggest rewriting the core part of the early-warning retraction text to explain more and to explicitly include the words "early-warning", like this: This candidate was initially identified by one or more early-warning analyses by matching partial signal templates to the data. Analysis of additional data up to the putative merger time, with full signal templates, did not make a significant detection, indicating that the initial candidate was likely due to transient noise.
In RAVEN_circular.jinja2, medium_latency_grb_detection_circular.jinja2 and medium_latency_grb_exclusion_circular.jinja2:
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Change FROM https://gcn.gsfc.nasa.gov/gcn3_archive.html
-->FROM https://gcn.nasa.gov/circulars
In userguide_conclusion.jinja2:
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Remove the angle brackets around the userguide URL.
In medium_latency_grb_exclusion_circular.jinja2:
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Change with the below assumptions
-->with the assumptions given below
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Change E_GW = 10^-2 M_sun
-->E_GW = 0.01 M_sun
And finally, in medium_latency_grb_detection_circular.jinja2:
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Personally, I am wary of promising too much in a circular. For this reason, I suggest removing some or all of this text: Offline analyses are ongoing. Any significant updates will be provided by a new circular.
Edited by Brandon Piotrzkowski